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In my opinion, music plays an important role in our life. I think most of you have an idol and I’m the same. I love Alan Olav Walker. He well known as Alan Walker, the most famous DJ in the world. He was born on August 24^th, 1997 in Northampton of England. His first song was Celebrate under the name DJ Walkzz on his own Youtube Channel. Alan started his dream in 2012 and he became popular with the hit name “ Faded ”. Faded makes who love music know Alan.

Alan Walker can play many musical instruments such as: Piano, keyboard, guitar…He always appears with the face covered with a mask. He thinks that, something mysteries always attract others and it’s the reason for why is he covering his face. When I listen to Alan’s song, I always in the best feeling I can. His music brings me the relaxed and happy. In anyway, I hope he can smile because he always try his best for music, for fans. With me, it’s enough and I’m sure that I will keep my love for him forever.

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In my opinion, music plays an important role in our life. I think most of you have an idol and I’m the same. I love Alan Olav Walker. He well known as Alan Walker, the most famous DJ in the world. He was born on August 24th, 1997 in Northampton of England. His first song was Celebrate under the name DJ Walkzz on his own Youtube Channel. Alan started his dream in 2012 and he became popular with the hit name “ Faded ”. Faded makes who love music know Alan.

Alan Walker can play many musical instruments such as: Piano, keyboard, guitar…He always appears with the face covered with a mask. He thinks that, something mysteries always attract others and it’s the reason for why is he covering his face. When I listen to Alan’s song, I always in the best feeling I can. His music brings me the relaxed and happy. In anyway, I hope he can smile because he always try his best for music, for fans. With me, it’s enough and I’m sure that I will keep my love for him forever.

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